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Monday, February 20, 2012

Tango of Torture

This blog post is for a challenge found on +Writ on Google plus, posted via Rach Writes. (I'm number 100 at Rach Writes if you like it and want to vote)

Tango of Torture

Shadows crept across the wall, as I cowered in the corner and waited for my attacker to pass out in to a drunken oblivion. His massive stature resisted the effects of the vast amount of alcohol longer than would have a smaller man. Allowing him more time to torture me. To describe in gory detail how my life would end. The orange glow of the fire flickered in unison with the shadows in a tango of torture. Must stay awake, lest their deathly dance becomes a celebration of my demise.

My pain temporarily subdued by numbness and adrenaline. An hour ago, I welcomed death. But in his drunken state, he got careless. I would be begging for the mercy of death again, come morning, if my plan failed.

I wriggled the ropes from my wrists, then my feet; my sight fixed on his ghastly face. His chest heaved up and down, snoring mimicking the saw he planned to use for my dismemberment. I urged to watch the life drain from his body. Would my attempt be futile against his strength?

I stood, grabbed the axe from the table and towered it above his head.

Vertigo invaded my body. Everything faded.

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The Challenge:

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count.
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:

end the story with the words: "everything faded." (also included in the word count)

include the word "orange" in the story

write in the same genre you normally write

make your story 200 words exactly!

23 comments:

  1. How about that. She's giving him the axe! Nice one. :)

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    1. David, giving him the axe seemed the karmic thing to do :)

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  2. Creepy!! Great job! :)

    I'm #37 :)

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  3. Argh! I was hoping she'd cleave his head in two! This is every woman's nightmare. Well done. I like it!

    New follower here. #96 on Rachel Harries Linky Link

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    1. It is every woman's nightmare, Nancy. *Shivers* Thanks for the follow!

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  4. why the vertigo? loved the title and very well written
    I'm #103

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    1. In my mind, after being tied up, tortured, probably dehydrated, weak and injured, and the extra weight and effort of lifting the axe, all of that would cause some dizziness upon standing. Can't say for sure though, since fortunately, I've never experienced any of it. Thanks for the positive feedback :)

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  5. Probably the creepiest I've read yet. Way to go! I'm at the end. #111

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  6. I could totally see vertigo after all this traumatizing stuff. Great job!

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    1. Thanks, Ashley, for the feedback and the follow!

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  7. Wow. This sent shivers up my spine. This is very well written and (for me at least) invokes a sense of fear.
    I'm actually one of the judges for this challenge and it's my honor to inform you that you've made the short list for round two. Congrats!

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    1. That's awesome, Samantha! Thank you for your comments and for the good news!

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  8. Ack, scary! Hope she got the bastard.

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  9. Really good tension and suspense here, Shirley! Great job! I'm #61

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  10. Really visual but kind of funny to see your picture out of the corner of my eye as I'm reading. You look so nice, not that your character isn't nice. I mean one can't be faulted for fighting back.

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  11. Wow, that was intense. Had me on the edge of my seat. Seems like she passed out at the end, I hope she managed to get him.

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  12. Thanks so much for the feedback and words of encouragement. I enjoyed reading each of your stories as well. Well Done! I love all the different takes on the writing prompt.

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  13. I would like to know if she ended up dismembered or if she dismembered him? Well done!

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